Thursday, 13 May 2010

Do you think this is more interesting and better?

3 comments:

  1. Hi Dot

    I think it's a great idea to start with the news headline rather than some description - although as we all said in the workshop you're so good at description that it would be a shame to cut out all of it - it just needs to be placed in the story in small chunks and while other things are happening to keep the reader hooked.

    It is also better to put questions like this in the original blog post instead of in an entry on it's own so that people don't get confused.

    Carry on blogging - you're doing great. I think you've cracked it now!

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  2. hi really like the revamp and i am gald you have managerd tokeep your descriptivenss which manages to tir in beautifuuly with the storywhich really kept my interest!!!well done!

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  3. oops just realised the above got loads of spelling mistakes hope you can read it i always forget about spellcheck - life to short to worry about spellingand grammer

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